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Debaser
Æèòåëü ôîðóìà


: 28.03.2003
: 941
: Cleveland, OH

: , 16, 2004 2:45pm     : Re: Î÷åíèòå ðåçþìå, please!

IMHO, íàäî óáðàòü âñå "I" èç ðåçþìå, à òàê æå óáðàòü:
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Gender: Male
Age: 18


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Objective Internship in Hospitality Business where I can contribute my skills and build my experience.

Objective: To obtain an entry level temporary position in Hospitality Business where I can contribute my skills and build my experience.

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Experience 1. Work on Contract, Winter 1999 – Summer 2004
I was creating custom-built programs for PC and lessons for drummers.

2. Customer Service, Summer 2002
Morozko, Ufa, Russia
Worked as a seller of ice-cream. Operated with the cash register and was closing the store. Voted employee of the month once.

WORK EXPERIENCE

Software Developer / Software Engeneer/ Programmer (???), ABC Company (??? Òóò ÿ ïðîñòî íå ïîíÿë ñ êàêîé êîìïàíèåé ó òåáÿ áûë êîíòðàêò) February 1999 - July 2004
- Developed DDD using V++
- ??? - íàäî ÷òî-íèáóäü íàïèñàòü ïðî skills related to the hospitality bussiness

Tutor, February 1999 - July 2004

-Did aaa and bbb
-blah-blah-blah

Customer Service representative (?)
Morozko Ltd, Inc, ... (?)

Òàê, äàëüøå ñîâñåì íåïîíÿòíî - customer service rep èëè Sales Dept. representative èëè store clerk? Òóò óæ ÷òî-íèáóäü îäíî íàäî âûáðàòü è íàïèñàòü
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Education Higher education
 University Name: Ufa State University Of Service (Ufa, Russia)
 Type of student: University Undergraduate Student
 Major Field of Study: Tourism and Hospitality Business
 Graduation date: 1 June 2008
 GPA: 5 of 5

High School
 School Name: English Gymnasium #39 (Ufa, Russia)
 GPA: 4.9 of 5


EDUCATION

Ufa State University Of Service (Ufa, Russia) (Òû óâåðåí ÷òî èìåííî òàê ïåðåâîäèòñÿ íàçâàíèå? ß íå ïîíÿë ÷åñòíî ãîâîðÿ êàêîå íàçâàíèå ïî-ðóññêè ó òâîåãî óíèâåðà)
Bachelor of Arts in Tourism and Hospitality Business
Graduation date: June 2008
Current GPA: 5 of 5

High School: English Gymnasium #39 (Ufa, Russia)
GPA: 4.9 of 5

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Honors
 The winner of the 5th and the 6th republic scientific conferences in information science and web-design among students – 2001, 2002
 The winner of the republic students contest in information science “KRIT-2003”
 The winner of the annual philological students conference – 2004


AWARDS

- WINNER (1st prize? åñëè äà, òî òàê è íàäî íàïèñàòü), 5th and the 6th republic scientific conferences in information science and web-design, 2001, 2002
.........


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Skills
 Fluent in English; working knowledge of German, Ukrainian and Bashkir
 Have excellent oral, writing and interpersonal communication skills
 Honest
 Highly organized, punctual
 Able to grasp new ideas and integrate them into desired results
 Computer experience: Advanced User (MS Windows 95-XP, MacOS, MS Office, HTML and web-design)
 Always eager to learn
Activities
 Playing drums (Fall 2001 to Present)
 Aikido (Summer 2003 to Present)
 Swimming (1996-2000)
 Judo and Unarmed self-defense (1993-1998)



SKILLS

- Fluent in English, Russian
- Working knowledge of German and Ukrainian (Èçâèíè, íî íå äóìàþ ÷òî êòî-íèáóäü çàèíòåðåñóåòñÿ áàøêèðñêèì, ïðè âñåì óâàæåíèè)
- Excellent oral, writing and interpersonal communication skills
- Able to grasp new ideas and integrate them into desired results (Õîðîøî áû ÷òîáû íàìåê íà ýòî áûë â WORK EXPERIENCE)

Activities - íå çíàþ, ìîæåò è íàäî èõ ïèñàòü äëÿ ðåçþìå íà òàêóþ ðàáîòó, Andrew ëó÷øå çíàåò
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Êëàññíî!


: Debaser (, 16, 2004 4:32pm), 1
Andrew
Ãëàâíûé òðåïà÷


: 01.03.2003
: 10421
: Èðêóòñê, RU -> Los Angeles, US

: , 16, 2004 3:46pm     : Re: Î÷åíèòå ðåçþìå, please!

Debaser ():
Activities - íå çíàþ, ìîæåò è íàäî èõ ïèñàòü äëÿ ðåçþìå íà òàêóþ ðàáîòó, Andrew ëó÷øå çíàåò

Âîîáùå, äóìàþ Activities íå íóæíî. Êîíå÷íî, ðàáîòîäàòåëü ìîæåò ïîñìîòðåòü êàêîé òû âñåñòîðîííå ðàçâèòûé, íî îíè æå housekeeper’à èùóò... Âîò åñëè èñêàòü ðàáîòó Lifeguard’à – òàì äà, ìîæíî óêàçàòü ÷òî ñïîðòèâíûå ñåêöèè ïîñåùàåøü è ò.ä. Âñå IMHO.

Debaser õîðîøèå çàìå÷àíèÿ ñäåëàë! Razz
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Àíäðåé Ãåðàñèìîâ
Debaser
Æèòåëü ôîðóìà


: 28.03.2003
: 941
: Cleveland, OH

: , 16, 2004 4:22pm     : Re: Î÷åíèòå ðåçþìå, please!

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Cover letter...
...
Áóäó âàì î÷åíü áëàãîäàðåí çà ëþáóþ ïîìîùü! Îãðîìíîå ñïàñèáî!

Ìíå êàæåòñÿ, ÷òî ãëîáàëüíî îðãàíèçàöèÿ ïèñüìà íå ñîâñåì ïðàâèëüíàÿ. Õîðîøî áû òàê:

- ß Âàñÿ Ïóïêèí è ÿ ó÷óñü êàê ðàç òàì ãäå âàì íàäî
- Âîçüìèòå ìåíÿ ê ñåáå íà òàêóþ-òî ïîçèöèü èáî âû êðóòû, È
- ß òîæå êðóò: blah blah blah, è íàì âìåñòå áóäåò çàå... çàøèáèñü
- I will be able to start my employment at XXX_Company on June 1, 2005 and expect to terminate it no later than October XX, 2005 (1 ïðåäëîæåíèå !)
- I am fully authorized to work in the US (1 ïðåäëîæåíèå !)
- Resume is enclosed
Íå íàäî ãðóçèòü ðàáîòîäàòåëÿ çàðàíåå ñâîèìè ïðîáëåìàìè ïî ïîâîäó òîãî êàê è êîãäà âû áóäåòå ïîëó÷àòü Social Security, Drivers License è áèëåòû â öèðê. Ïîäðàçóìåâàåòñÿ ÷òî âñå ýòî ó òåáÿ áóäåò è òàê. Íèêòî íå ëþáèò ÷èòàòü äëèííûå ïèñüìà.
Âîò ýòî âñå íàôèã:
sponsored by the Council on International Exchange (Council Exchanges). I will possess all the necessary legal working documents for employment in the United States from the 1st June up to the 1st October. I will apply for a Social Security Card once I arrive in the U.S.. I should know my exact date of arrival once my visa and paperwork have been processed.

Íà÷àòü êàê-íèäü òàê:

Dear Mr. ÕÕÕ:

My name is XXX YYY, I am a sophomore student at QQQ University, majoðring in Tourism and Hospitality Business. I would like to apply for a temporary position of ??? at XXX_Company. My experience in (Êîíêðåòíî êàêîé) ... òî åñòü ÿ êðóò. Òóò æå ìîæíî ïðî ñêèëëñ.

Ó ìåíÿ ñëîæèëîñü òàêîå âïå÷àòëåíèå ÷òî òû äåðæèøü àäðåñàòà ýòîãî ïèñüìà çà êëèíè÷åñêîãî èäèîòà. Ïîïðîáóé ïåðåâåñòè ïèñüìî íà ðóññêèé è ïðî÷èòàòü åãî ñàì òàê, êàê áóäòî áû îíî áûëî àäðåñîâàíî òåáå.

As you will notice on my resume, I study in...

Íó òî åñòü ñ êîíòåêñòîì - èäè ðåçþìå ÷èòàé, òàì íàïèñàíî. Íå íàäî òàê áóäóùèì ðàáîòîäàòåëåì êîìàíäîâàòü

Working in customer service as a seller of ice-cream I have à proven capacity to approach problems creatively and effectively, and work well both independently and in a team environment.

Òåáå ñàìîìó íå ñìåøíî? íó êàêîé òâîð÷åñêèé ïîäõîä â ïðîäàæå ïëîìáèðà? êàêèå ïðîáëåìû? Êàêàÿ ðàáîòà â team environment? ÿ òåáå äàþ 10 ðóáëåé, òû ìíå - ìîðîæåíîå, end of story. Íàñêîëüêî ÿ ïîíÿë òû ïðîñòî ïåðåäðàë ýòîò êóñîê ñ îáðàçöà. Åñëè ÿ ýòî ïîíÿë, òî ýòî åùå áûñòðåå ïîéìåò è ðàáîòîäàòåëü. Îïÿòü æå îïðåäåëèñü - èëè customer service èëè ïðîäàâåö. Íó è àíãëèéñêèé ïîïðàâèòü íàäî áóäåò çàíîâî êîãäà ïåðåïèøåøü.

Äà, è âñå ôðàçû - ÿ êðóò â òîì è â òîì íóæíî ïîäêðåïèòü êðàòêèìè, íî ÊÎÍÊÒÐÅÒÍÛÌÈ ïðèìåðàìè, èíà÷å - íåóáåäèòåëüíî.
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Êëàññíî!
Estranged
Íîâè÷îê


: 04.11.2004
: 12
: Ufa

: , 16, 2004 7:16pm     :

Ëó÷øå íå íàäî

: Estranged (, 7, 2008 4:09pm), 1
Andrew
Ãëàâíûé òðåïà÷


: 01.03.2003
: 10421
: Èðêóòñê, RU -> Los Angeles, US

: , 16, 2004 10:51pm     : Re: Î÷åíèòå ðåçþìå, please!

Debaser ():
Âîò ýòî âñå íàôèã:
sponsored by the Council on International Exchange (Council Exchanges). I will possess all the necessary legal working documents for employment in the United States from the 1st June up to the 1st October. I will apply for a Social Security Card once I arrive in the U.S.. I should know my exact date of arrival once my visa and paperwork have been processed.

Ñïîíñîð ñàì ðåêîìåíäóåò èìåòü ýòó èíôîðìàöèþ â cover latter. Õîòÿ ñîãëàñåí – ëèøíåãî íå íóæíî. Ê òîìó æå, òå îðãàíèçàöèè, êòî ðàáîòàþò ñ J1-ñòóäåíòàìè è áåç ýòîãî çíàþò âñå ëó÷øå ó÷àñòíèêîâ. Íî îïÿòü æå, ìîæíî âñòðåòèòü è òàêîãî ðàáîòîäàòåëÿ, êîòîðîãî ìîæåò îòïóãíóòü èíôà î òîì, ÷òî ÷åëîâåê èç Ðîññèè èùåò ðàáîòó, à òàê çàéäåò íà ñàéò Council Exchange è âñå óçíàåò ïðî ñòóäåí÷åñêèé îáìåí.
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Àíäðåé Ãåðàñèìîâ
Debaser
Æèòåëü ôîðóìà


: 28.03.2003
: 941
: Cleveland, OH

: , 17, 2004 12:04am     : Re: Î÷åíèòå ðåçþìå, please!

Andrew ():
Íî îïÿòü æå, ìîæíî âñòðåòèòü è òàêîãî ðàáîòîäàòåëÿ, êîòîðîãî ìîæåò îòïóãíóòü èíôà î òîì, ÷òî ÷åëîâåê èç Ðîññèè èùåò ðàáîòó, à òàê çàéäåò íà ñàéò Council Exchange è âñå óçíàåò ïðî ñòóäåí÷åñêèé îáìåí.

Ñêàæó ïî ñåêðåòó, íè íà êàêîé ñàéò òàêîé ðàáîòîäàòåëü çàõîäèòü íå áóäåò, íàôèã åìó ýòî íå íàäî. Íîðìàëüíîãî ðàáîòîäàòåëÿ âîëíóåò îäíî - áóäåò ëè íàíÿòûé ðàáîòíèê ðàáîòàòü çà òàêèå ñìåøíûå äåíüãè è áóäåò ëè ýòî çàêîííî. Âñå îñòàëüíîå åãî ïðîñòî íå èíòåðåñóåò.
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Êëàññíî!
Debaser
Æèòåëü ôîðóìà


: 28.03.2003
: 941
: Cleveland, OH

: , 17, 2004 12:28am     :

Estranged ():
Debaser, îãðîìíîå ñïàñèáî!

You're Welcome Ñìåõ

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Education Higher education
 University Name: Ufa State University of Service (Ufa, Russia)
 Diploma: Bachelor of Arts in Tourism and Hospitality Business
 Graduation date: June 2008
 Current GPA: 5 of 5


Ñëîâà Higher education, University Name, Diploma - ëèøíèå. Ê òîìó æå bachelor - ýòî íå diploma, a degree, òî áèøü ñòåïåíü
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1) Íè â îäíîì ðåçþìå íà çàïàäíûõ ñàéòàõ ÿ íå âèäåë óêàçàííîãî àäðåñà ìåñòà ðàáîòû.
2) À óíèâåð ìîé - Óôèìñêèé Ãîñ. Óíèâåðñèòåò Ñåðâèñà (çàâòðà òî÷íî óçíàþ, íî âñåãäà òàê ïèñàë ...)
3) Activities, ïóñòü íà âñÿèé áóäóò, íå çàõî÷åò ÷èòàòü - íå áóäåò, îíè â ñàìîì êîíöå
4) êàê ïðàâèëüíî íàïèñàòü òî, êåì áóäó ïîñëå îêîí÷àíèÿ óíèâåðà? Diploma: Bachelor...?

1) Íó äà, à â ÷åì ïðîáëåìà?
2) Ñòðàííîå íàçâàíèå... Íó òîãäà Ufa State University of Service äåéñòâèòåëüíî
3) ÎÊ
4) Ïðîñòî Bachelor of Arts in Tourism and Hospitality Business

ß áû íåìíîãî ðåîðãàíèçîâàë ïèñüìî. Oïÿòü æå òû ïîñëàë ðàáîòîäàòåëÿ â êîíöå ïèñüìà ðåçþìå ÷èòàòü, ÿ òàì ñèíèì èçìåíèë. Åùå ÿ áû ñîêðàòèë âòîðîé àáçàö ïðî ìîðîæåíîå, à â òàêîì äóõå íàïèñàë áû 1-ûé àáçàö ïðî îòåëü.

Îïÿòü æå íåñêîëüêî íàãëî ñïðàøèâàòü ïðî accomodation, âðîäå òåáÿ íå âçÿëè åùå, íî ýòî êàê ðàç ìîæåò è ÎÊ, òóò íå óâåðåí

Êîðî÷å, ãäå-òî òàê:
<...>

My name is Knyazev Kirill, I am a sophomore student at Ufa State University of Service, majoðring in Tourism and Hospitality Business. I would like to apply for a temporary position of housekeeper at Accor Company. I have previous experience working in a hotel for two summers. My responsibilities included guest rooms cleaning, rooms inspection and reporting to the hotel front desk on their condition.

Working as a shop assistant during summer 2002 I have proven capacity to approach problems creatively and effectively, and work well both independently and in a team environment. There was a variety of new ice-cream cakes in the shop which were not popular among customers, so I proposed a "buy two boxes of ice-cream - get a free cake" offer. After a week, ice-cream cakes sales increased by more then 120%, and overall sales doubled. That month I was chosen an employee of the month.

By working in different areas I have developed oral, writing and interpersonal communication skills. I am highly organized and honest person and always eager to learn.

I would greatly appreciate if you provide me with some additional informational materials regarding employment opportunities at Accor Hotel, including an application form if necessary. Also, I would appreciate any information regarding my accommodation in or around the hotel during my possible employmet.

I will be able to start my employment at Accor Hotel on June 1, 2005 and expect to terminate it no later than October 1, 2005. I am fully authorized to work in the US.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I would be happy to discuss my employment opportunity at XXX hotel by e-mail xxx@hotmail.com or phone 7-(123)-123-4567

Sincerely,
Knyazev Kirill
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Êëàññíî!


: Debaser (, 17, 2004 12:50am), 1
Debaser
Æèòåëü ôîðóìà


: 28.03.2003
: 941
: Cleveland, OH

: , 17, 2004 12:45am     :

 äîãîíêó.  ðàçäåëå awards ïåðâûì äåëîì íóæíî ïèñàòü ïðî employee of the month, à íå ïðî ïðîãðàìèñòñêèå êîíêóðñû, IMHO.
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Êëàññíî!
Andrew
Ãëàâíûé òðåïà÷


: 01.03.2003
: 10421
: Èðêóòñê, RU -> Los Angeles, US

: , 17, 2004 8:08am     : Re: Î÷åíèòå ðåçþìå, please!

Debaser ():
Ñêàæó ïî ñåêðåòó, íè íà êàêîé ñàéò òàêîé ðàáîòîäàòåëü çàõîäèòü íå áóäåò, íàôèã åìó ýòî íå íàäî. Íîðìàëüíîãî ðàáîòîäàòåëÿ âîëíóåò îäíî - áóäåò ëè íàíÿòûé ðàáîòíèê ðàáîòàòü çà òàêèå ñìåøíûå äåíüãè è áóäåò ëè ýòî çàêîííî. Âñå îñòàëüíîå åãî ïðîñòî íå èíòåðåñóåò.

 ïðèíöèïå äà, òû ïðàâ.
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Àíäðåé Ãåðàñèìîâ
Estranged
Íîâè÷îê


: 04.11.2004
: 12
: Ufa

: , 30, 2004 8:08am     :

Ëó÷øå íå íàäî

: Estranged (, 7, 2008 4:10pm), 1
Andrew
Ãëàâíûé òðåïà÷


: 01.03.2003
: 10421
: Èðêóòñê, RU -> Los Angeles, US

: , 30, 2004 8:17am     :

Ïðîãðåññ íà ëèöî Óëûáêà

Åñëè âñå-òàêè óâåðåí, ÷òî íóæíî óêàçûâàòü “Tutor” – ïóñòü áóäåò. Ëè÷íî ÿ áû íå ñòàë, íàâåðíîå.

Óäà÷è ñ ïîèñêîì ðàáîòû!
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Àíäðåé Ãåðàñèìîâ
Debaser
Æèòåëü ôîðóìà


: 28.03.2003
: 941
: Cleveland, OH

: , 30, 2004 1:21pm     :

֏!
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Êëàññíî!
Helen_NJ
Æèòåëü ôîðóìà


: 13.11.2003
: 1539
: NC, USA

: , 1, 2004 3:10am     :

Estranged, ïîãîäü åùå, íå îòïðàâëÿé ðåçþìå ñ ïèñüìîì. Ñì. íèæå ìîþ ïðàâêó ïðÿìî â òåêñòå. Èñïðàâëåííîå âûäåëåíî êóðñèâîì, à âûäåëåííîå êðàñíûì íóæíî óäàëèòü. Êîììåíòàðèè è ðàçúÿñíåíèÿ ñëåäóþò çà öèòàòîé.

Estranged ():
KNYAZEV KIRILL
Address: 13G-21 Sophie Perovskoi Street
Ufa, Bashkortostan, Russia 450103
Phone: 7 3472-545-119
Mobile: 89174008069
E-mail: knkirill@hotmail.com
Gender: Male
Age: 18



Objective
A temporary entry-level position in Hospitality Industry in which my experience and training can be utilized to our mutual benefit.

Experience 1. Tutor, April 2002 – October 2004
 Taught students to play drums.

2. Housekeeper
June-August 2003
June-August 2004
Hotel Tourist, Ufa, Russia
 Cleaned the hotel guest rooms
Inspected rooms and suites, reported to the hotel front desk which suites were clean.

3. Shop assistant, June – August 2002
Morozko Shop, Ufa, Russia
Responsible for the ice cream sales in a specialty store.
Education Higher education
Currently attending Ufa State University of Service (Ufa, Russia)
Majoring in Tourism and Hospitality Business

Estimated graduation date: June 2008
Current GPA: 5 of 5

High School Diploma
English Gymnasia #39 (Ufa, Russia) çäåñü íàäî ãîä îêîí÷àíèÿ øêîëû!
GPA: 4.9 of 5
Awards
 Employee of the month, Morozko Shop, August 2002
 Winner, 5th and the 6th republic scientific conferences in information science and web-design, 2001, 2002
 Winner, republic students contest in information science “KRIT-2003”
 Winner, annual philological students conference, 2004

Skills
 Fluent in English, Russian
Considerable knowledge of German and Ukrainian
 Excellent oral, writing and interpersonal communication skills
 Highly organized
 Able to grasp new ideas and integrate them into desired results
 Computer experience: Advanced User (MS Windows 95-XP, MS Office, HTML and web design)

Activities  Playing drums (Fall 2001 to Present)
 Aikido (Summer 2003 to Present)
 Swimming (1996-2000)
 Judo and Unarmed self-defense (1993-1998)

:

KNYAZEV KIRILL
13G-21 Sophie Perovskoi Street
Ufa, Bashkortostan, Russia 450103
(3472) 545-119
knkirill@hotmail.com

November 17, 2004
READER’S NAME
Reader's Title
Name of Company
Company Address
Dear Mr. READER’S NAME :

As a sophomore student at Ufa State University of Service, majoring in Tourism and Hospitality Business, I will participate in the “Work and Travel USA” program sponsored by the International Exchange Council. I would like to apply for a temporary position as a housekeeper at Accor Company. I have 6 months of experience working as a housekeeper in the Tourist hotel in Russia. My responsibilities included guest rooms cleaning, rooms inspection and reporting to the hotel front desk on their condition.

Working as a Shop Assistant during summer 2002, I have proven capacity to approach problems creatively and effectively, and to work well both independently and in a team environment. There was a variety of new ice cream cakes in the shop, which were not popular among customers, so I proposed a "buy two boxes of ice cream - get a free cake" offer. After just a week, ice cream cakes sales increased by more than 120%, and overall in-store sales doubled. As a result, I was named Employee of the Month.

By working in different areas I have developed oral, writing and interpersonal communication skills. I am highly organized and honest person and always eager to learn.

I will be able to start my employment with your company on June 1, 2005 and expect to terminate it no later than October 1, 2005. I am fully authorized to work in the US.

I would greatly appreciate if you could provide me with some additional information regarding employment opportunities at Accor Hotel, including an application form, if necessary. Also, I would appreciate any information regarding accommodations in or around the hotel during my possible employment.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I will be happy to discuss my employment opportunity at Accor hotel by e-mail knkirill@hotmail.com or by phone 7-(3472)-545-119.

Sincerely,
Kirill Knyazev


Êîììåíòàðèè ê ïðàâêå:
1. Ôîðìàò àäðåñà â ÑØÀ: äîì, íàçâàíèå óëèöû, íîìåð êâàðòèðû
2. Íåàêêóðàòíîñòü - ýòî î÷åíü áîëüøàÿ îøèáêà, êîòîðóþ äîïóñêàþò ìíîãèå àâòîðû ðåçþìå. Íàïðèìåð, ó âàñ â îäíîì íîìåðå òåëåôîíà ñòîÿò ÷åðòî÷êè, à â äðóãîì íåò, ïîòîì äàòà íàïèñàíà "2003 & 2004" è ò.ä. Êàçàëîñü áû ìåëî÷ü, íî òîìó, êòî ÷èòàåò ðåçþìå, ýòî ñðàçó ãîâîðèò î âàøåì "attention to details" (or lack thereof). Ðåçþìå äîëæíî áûòü âûëèçàíî äî çàïÿòîé - àäðåñà, äàòû âñå â îäíîì ôîðìàòå, âåçäå îäèí ñòèëü è ò.ï.
3. Âîçðàñò è ïîë â ÑØÀ íå ïðèíÿòî óêàçûâàòü â ðåçþìå (õîòÿ ýòî íîðìàëüíî, íàïðèìåð, â Ãåðìàíèè). Òóò âñå î÷åíü ÷óâñòâèòåëüíû ê âîïðîñàì ëþáîé äèñêðèìèíàöèè è âàøå ðåçþìå äîëæíû îöåíèâàòü íà îñíîâå íàâûêîâ è îïûòà, à íå ïîëà è âîçðàñòà. Åñëè õîòèòå, âîçðàñò ìîæíî óïîìÿíóòü â cover letter, õîòÿ ïðèìåðíûé âîçðàñò ðàáîòîäàòåëü ìîæåò óãàäàòü ïî äàòàì îêîí÷àíèÿ øêîëû/óíèâåðñèòåòà. Ýòî âû, êñòàòè, çàáûëè óêàçàòü.
4. Îáðàçîâàíèå ïèøåòñÿ â ôîðìàòå: ïîëó÷åííàÿ ñòåïåíü (äèïëîì èëè àòòåñòàò), íàçâàíèå ó÷åáíîãî ó÷ðåæäåíèÿ, ãîä. Ò.ê. âû åùå ó÷èòåñü, âû íå ìîæåòå óêàçûâàòü Bachelor, ïðîñòî óêàæèòå "major". Äà, Gymnasium (AKA Gym) - ýòî ñïîðòçàë, ãèìíàçèÿ - ýòî Gymnasia, íå ïóòàéòå.
5. Èç âàøåãî ðåçþìå áûëî íå î÷åíü ïîíÿòíî, ÷òî âû åùå ó÷èòåñü è èùåòå ðàáîòó òîëüêî íà ëåòî. Ïîýòîìó ÿ èçìåíèëà Objective è íà÷àëî cover letter.
6. Âû î÷åíü ìàëî ðàññêàçûâàåòå î òîì, ÷òî äåëàëè íà ðàáîòå, íàäî áû äîáàâèòü. ×åñòíî ãîâîðÿ, ÿ íå çíàþ, çà÷åì âîîáùå óïîìèíàòü "tutor" - âûãëÿäèò áóäòî âû íåñêîëüêî ëåò, êàê çàé÷èê-ýíåðäæàéçåð, íà áàðàáàíå ñòó÷àëè. Íå çíàþ
7. Shop assistant ìîæåò áûòü íå î÷åíü ïðàâèëüíûì ïåðåâîäîì. Êàê ïî-ðóññêè-òî áûëî?
8. ß íåìíîãî íå ïîíÿëà, êàê ìîæíî áûòü "winner" íà êîíôåðåíöèè. Äóìàþ ðàáîòîäàòåëè òîæå íå ïîéìóò. Íàïèøèòå ëó÷øå "Award winner of the 5th and the 6th Republic Scientific Conference in Information Science" èëè ÷òî-òî â ýòîì ðîäå (íàçâàíèÿ íàäî ñ áîëüøîé áóêâû íà÷èíàòü, êñòàòè).
9. Åñëè âû íå çíàåòå èìåíè ïîëó÷àòåëÿ, ïèñüìî íàäî íà÷èíàòü "Dear Sir or Madam". Íå çàáûâàéòå èñïðàâëÿòü íà Ms, åñëè îáðàùàåòåñü ê æåíùèíå.
10. Íå íà÷èíàéòå ïèñüìî ñ "My name is...". Âî-ïåðâûõ, ýòî íå øêîëüíûé òîïèê, âî-âòîðûõ, âàøå èìÿ óæå óêàçàíî âûøå. Åñëè ïèøåòå ñâîå èìÿ, òî ñíà÷àëà ïèøèòå èìÿ, à ïîòîì ôàìèëèþ (íåäàðîì â ÑØÀ ãîâîðÿò "first name", "last name"!)
11. Ice cream ïèøåòñÿ ðàçäåëüíî, à entry-level ÷åðåç äåôèñ.
12. "cakes sales" (è åùå ìíîãî àíàëîãè÷íûõ) - î÷åíü ðàñïðîñòðàíåííàÿ îøèáêà ñðåäè ðóññêîÿçû÷íûõ. Ïðàâèëüíî "cake sales" èëè "sales of the cakes". Åñëè íàäî ðàçúÿñíåíèå - ýòî â äðóãóþ òåìó.

Åñëè ÷òî-òî ïðîïóñòèëà - ñîððè.
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