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Debaser Æèòåëü ôîðóìà
: 28.03.2003 : 941 : Cleveland, OH
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IMHO, íàäî óáðàòü âñå "I" èç ðåçþìå, à òàê æå óáðàòü:
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Gender: Male
Age: 18
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Objective Internship in Hospitality Business where I can contribute my skills and build my experience.
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Objective: To obtain an entry level temporary position in Hospitality Business where I can contribute my skills and build my experience.
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Experience 1. Work on Contract, Winter 1999 – Summer 2004
I was creating custom-built programs for PC and lessons for drummers.
2. Customer Service, Summer 2002
Morozko, Ufa, Russia
Worked as a seller of ice-cream. Operated with the cash register and was closing the store. Voted employee of the month once.
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WORK EXPERIENCE
Software Developer / Software Engeneer/ Programmer (???), ABC Company (??? Òóò ÿ ïðîñòî íå ïîíÿë ñ êàêîé êîìïàíèåé ó òåáÿ áûë êîíòðàêò) February 1999 - July 2004
- Developed DDD using V++
- ??? - íàäî ÷òî-íèáóäü íàïèñàòü ïðî skills related to the hospitality bussiness
Tutor, February 1999 - July 2004
-Did aaa and bbb
-blah-blah-blah
Customer Service representative (?)
Morozko Ltd, Inc, ... (?)
Òàê, äàëüøå ñîâñåì íåïîíÿòíî - customer service rep èëè Sales Dept. representative èëè store clerk? Òóò óæ ÷òî-íèáóäü îäíî íàäî âûáðàòü è íàïèñàòü
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Education Higher education
University Name: Ufa State University Of Service (Ufa, Russia)
Type of student: University Undergraduate Student
Major Field of Study: Tourism and Hospitality Business
Graduation date: 1 June 2008
GPA: 5 of 5
High School
School Name: English Gymnasium #39 (Ufa, Russia)
GPA: 4.9 of 5
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EDUCATION
Ufa State University Of Service (Ufa, Russia) (Òû óâåðåí ÷òî èìåííî òàê ïåðåâîäèòñÿ íàçâàíèå? ß íå ïîíÿë ÷åñòíî ãîâîðÿ êàêîå íàçâàíèå ïî-ðóññêè ó òâîåãî óíèâåðà)
Bachelor of Arts in Tourism and Hospitality Business
Graduation date: June 2008
Current GPA: 5 of 5
High School: English Gymnasium #39 (Ufa, Russia)
GPA: 4.9 of 5
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Honors
The winner of the 5th and the 6th republic scientific conferences in information science and web-design among students – 2001, 2002
The winner of the republic students contest in information science “KRIT-2003”
The winner of the annual philological students conference – 2004
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AWARDS
- WINNER (1st prize? åñëè äà, òî òàê è íàäî íàïèñàòü), 5th and the 6th republic scientific conferences in information science and web-design, 2001, 2002
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Skills
Fluent in English; working knowledge of German, Ukrainian and Bashkir
Have excellent oral, writing and interpersonal communication skills
Honest
Highly organized, punctual
Able to grasp new ideas and integrate them into desired results
Computer experience: Advanced User (MS Windows 95-XP, MacOS, MS Office, HTML and web-design)
Always eager to learn
Activities
Playing drums (Fall 2001 to Present)
Aikido (Summer 2003 to Present)
Swimming (1996-2000)
Judo and Unarmed self-defense (1993-1998)
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- Fluent in English, Russian
- Working knowledge of German and Ukrainian (Èçâèíè, íî íå äóìàþ ÷òî êòî-íèáóäü çàèíòåðåñóåòñÿ áàøêèðñêèì, ïðè âñåì óâàæåíèè)
- Excellent oral, writing and interpersonal communication skills
- Able to grasp new ideas and integrate them into desired results (Õîðîøî áû ÷òîáû íàìåê íà ýòî áûë â WORK EXPERIENCE)
Activities - íå çíàþ, ìîæåò è íàäî èõ ïèñàòü äëÿ ðåçþìå íà òàêóþ ðàáîòó, Andrew ëó÷øå çíàåò _________________
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Andrew Ãëàâíûé òðåïà÷
: 01.03.2003 : 10421 : Èðêóòñê, RU -> Los Angeles, US
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Activities - íå çíàþ, ìîæåò è íàäî èõ ïèñàòü äëÿ ðåçþìå íà òàêóþ ðàáîòó, Andrew ëó÷øå çíàåò |
Âîîáùå, äóìàþ Activities íå íóæíî. Êîíå÷íî, ðàáîòîäàòåëü ìîæåò ïîñìîòðåòü êàêîé òû âñåñòîðîííå ðàçâèòûé, íî îíè æå housekeeper’à èùóò... Âîò åñëè èñêàòü ðàáîòó Lifeguard’à – òàì äà, ìîæíî óêàçàòü ÷òî ñïîðòèâíûå ñåêöèè ïîñåùàåøü è ò.ä. Âñå IMHO.
Debaser õîðîøèå çàìå÷àíèÿ ñäåëàë! _________________ Àíäðåé Ãåðàñèìîâ |
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Debaser Æèòåëü ôîðóìà
: 28.03.2003 : 941 : Cleveland, OH
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: , 16, 2004 4:22pm : Re: Î÷åíèòå ðåçþìå, please! |
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Cover letter...
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Áóäó âàì î÷åíü áëàãîäàðåí çà ëþáóþ ïîìîùü! Îãðîìíîå ñïàñèáî! |
Ìíå êàæåòñÿ, ÷òî ãëîáàëüíî îðãàíèçàöèÿ ïèñüìà íå ñîâñåì ïðàâèëüíàÿ. Õîðîøî áû òàê:
- ß Âàñÿ Ïóïêèí è ÿ ó÷óñü êàê ðàç òàì ãäå âàì íàäî
- Âîçüìèòå ìåíÿ ê ñåáå íà òàêóþ-òî ïîçèöèü èáî âû êðóòû, È
- ß òîæå êðóò: blah blah blah, è íàì âìåñòå áóäåò çàå... çàøèáèñü
- I will be able to start my employment at XXX_Company on June 1, 2005 and expect to terminate it no later than October XX, 2005 (1 ïðåäëîæåíèå !)
- I am fully authorized to work in the US (1 ïðåäëîæåíèå !)
- Resume is enclosed
Íå íàäî ãðóçèòü ðàáîòîäàòåëÿ çàðàíåå ñâîèìè ïðîáëåìàìè ïî ïîâîäó òîãî êàê è êîãäà âû áóäåòå ïîëó÷àòü Social Security, Drivers License è áèëåòû â öèðê. Ïîäðàçóìåâàåòñÿ ÷òî âñå ýòî ó òåáÿ áóäåò è òàê. Íèêòî íå ëþáèò ÷èòàòü äëèííûå ïèñüìà.
Âîò ýòî âñå íàôèã:
sponsored by the Council on International Exchange (Council Exchanges). I will possess all the necessary legal working documents for employment in the United States from the 1st June up to the 1st October. I will apply for a Social Security Card once I arrive in the U.S.. I should know my exact date of arrival once my visa and paperwork have been processed.
Íà÷àòü êàê-íèäü òàê:
Dear Mr. ÕÕÕ:
My name is XXX YYY, I am a sophomore student at QQQ University, majoðring in Tourism and Hospitality Business. I would like to apply for a temporary position of ??? at XXX_Company. My experience in (Êîíêðåòíî êàêîé) ... òî åñòü ÿ êðóò. Òóò æå ìîæíî ïðî ñêèëëñ.
Ó ìåíÿ ñëîæèëîñü òàêîå âïå÷àòëåíèå ÷òî òû äåðæèøü àäðåñàòà ýòîãî ïèñüìà çà êëèíè÷åñêîãî èäèîòà. Ïîïðîáóé ïåðåâåñòè ïèñüìî íà ðóññêèé è ïðî÷èòàòü åãî ñàì òàê, êàê áóäòî áû îíî áûëî àäðåñîâàíî òåáå.
As you will notice on my resume, I study in...
Íó òî åñòü ñ êîíòåêñòîì - èäè ðåçþìå ÷èòàé, òàì íàïèñàíî. Íå íàäî òàê áóäóùèì ðàáîòîäàòåëåì êîìàíäîâàòü
Working in customer service as a seller of ice-cream I have à proven capacity to approach problems creatively and effectively, and work well both independently and in a team environment.
Òåáå ñàìîìó íå ñìåøíî? íó êàêîé òâîð÷åñêèé ïîäõîä â ïðîäàæå ïëîìáèðà? êàêèå ïðîáëåìû? Êàêàÿ ðàáîòà â team environment? ÿ òåáå äàþ 10 ðóáëåé, òû ìíå - ìîðîæåíîå, end of story. Íàñêîëüêî ÿ ïîíÿë òû ïðîñòî ïåðåäðàë ýòîò êóñîê ñ îáðàçöà. Åñëè ÿ ýòî ïîíÿë, òî ýòî åùå áûñòðåå ïîéìåò è ðàáîòîäàòåëü. Îïÿòü æå îïðåäåëèñü - èëè customer service èëè ïðîäàâåö. Íó è àíãëèéñêèé ïîïðàâèòü íàäî áóäåò çàíîâî êîãäà ïåðåïèøåøü.
Äà, è âñå ôðàçû - ÿ êðóò â òîì è â òîì íóæíî ïîäêðåïèòü êðàòêèìè, íî ÊÎÍÊÒÐÅÒÍÛÌÈ ïðèìåðàìè, èíà÷å - íåóáåäèòåëüíî. _________________
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Andrew Ãëàâíûé òðåïà÷
: 01.03.2003 : 10421 : Èðêóòñê, RU -> Los Angeles, US
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Âîò ýòî âñå íàôèã:
sponsored by the Council on International Exchange (Council Exchanges). I will possess all the necessary legal working documents for employment in the United States from the 1st June up to the 1st October. I will apply for a Social Security Card once I arrive in the U.S.. I should know my exact date of arrival once my visa and paperwork have been processed. |
Ñïîíñîð ñàì ðåêîìåíäóåò èìåòü ýòó èíôîðìàöèþ â cover latter. Õîòÿ ñîãëàñåí – ëèøíåãî íå íóæíî. Ê òîìó æå, òå îðãàíèçàöèè, êòî ðàáîòàþò ñ J1-ñòóäåíòàìè è áåç ýòîãî çíàþò âñå ëó÷øå ó÷àñòíèêîâ. Íî îïÿòü æå, ìîæíî âñòðåòèòü è òàêîãî ðàáîòîäàòåëÿ, êîòîðîãî ìîæåò îòïóãíóòü èíôà î òîì, ÷òî ÷åëîâåê èç Ðîññèè èùåò ðàáîòó, à òàê çàéäåò íà ñàéò Council Exchange è âñå óçíàåò ïðî ñòóäåí÷åñêèé îáìåí. _________________ Àíäðåé Ãåðàñèìîâ |
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Debaser Æèòåëü ôîðóìà
: 28.03.2003 : 941 : Cleveland, OH
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: , 17, 2004 12:04am : Re: Î÷åíèòå ðåçþìå, please! |
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Íî îïÿòü æå, ìîæíî âñòðåòèòü è òàêîãî ðàáîòîäàòåëÿ, êîòîðîãî ìîæåò îòïóãíóòü èíôà î òîì, ÷òî ÷åëîâåê èç Ðîññèè èùåò ðàáîòó, à òàê çàéäåò íà ñàéò Council Exchange è âñå óçíàåò ïðî ñòóäåí÷åñêèé îáìåí. |
Ñêàæó ïî ñåêðåòó, íè íà êàêîé ñàéò òàêîé ðàáîòîäàòåëü çàõîäèòü íå áóäåò, íàôèã åìó ýòî íå íàäî. Íîðìàëüíîãî ðàáîòîäàòåëÿ âîëíóåò îäíî - áóäåò ëè íàíÿòûé ðàáîòíèê ðàáîòàòü çà òàêèå ñìåøíûå äåíüãè è áóäåò ëè ýòî çàêîííî. Âñå îñòàëüíîå åãî ïðîñòî íå èíòåðåñóåò. _________________
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Debaser Æèòåëü ôîðóìà
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Debaser, îãðîìíîå ñïàñèáî!
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Education Higher education
University Name: Ufa State University of Service (Ufa, Russia)
Diploma: Bachelor of Arts in Tourism and Hospitality Business
Graduation date: June 2008
Current GPA: 5 of 5
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Ñëîâà Higher education, University Name, Diploma - ëèøíèå. Ê òîìó æå bachelor - ýòî íå diploma, a degree, òî áèøü ñòåïåíü
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1) Íè â îäíîì ðåçþìå íà çàïàäíûõ ñàéòàõ ÿ íå âèäåë óêàçàííîãî àäðåñà ìåñòà ðàáîòû.
2) À óíèâåð ìîé - Óôèìñêèé Ãîñ. Óíèâåðñèòåò Ñåðâèñà (çàâòðà òî÷íî óçíàþ, íî âñåãäà òàê ïèñàë ...)
3) Activities, ïóñòü íà âñÿèé áóäóò, íå çàõî÷åò ÷èòàòü - íå áóäåò, îíè â ñàìîì êîíöå
4) êàê ïðàâèëüíî íàïèñàòü òî, êåì áóäó ïîñëå îêîí÷àíèÿ óíèâåðà? Diploma: Bachelor...?
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1) Íó äà, à â ÷åì ïðîáëåìà?
2) Ñòðàííîå íàçâàíèå... Íó òîãäà Ufa State University of Service äåéñòâèòåëüíî
3) ÎÊ
4) Ïðîñòî Bachelor of Arts in Tourism and Hospitality Business
ß áû íåìíîãî ðåîðãàíèçîâàë ïèñüìî. Oïÿòü æå òû ïîñëàë ðàáîòîäàòåëÿ â êîíöå ïèñüìà ðåçþìå ÷èòàòü, ÿ òàì ñèíèì èçìåíèë. Åùå ÿ áû ñîêðàòèë âòîðîé àáçàö ïðî ìîðîæåíîå, à â òàêîì äóõå íàïèñàë áû 1-ûé àáçàö ïðî îòåëü.
Îïÿòü æå íåñêîëüêî íàãëî ñïðàøèâàòü ïðî accomodation, âðîäå òåáÿ íå âçÿëè åùå, íî ýòî êàê ðàç ìîæåò è ÎÊ, òóò íå óâåðåí
Êîðî÷å, ãäå-òî òàê:
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My name is Knyazev Kirill, I am a sophomore student at Ufa State University of Service, majoðring in Tourism and Hospitality Business. I would like to apply for a temporary position of housekeeper at Accor Company. I have previous experience working in a hotel for two summers. My responsibilities included guest rooms cleaning, rooms inspection and reporting to the hotel front desk on their condition.
Working as a shop assistant during summer 2002 I have proven capacity to approach problems creatively and effectively, and work well both independently and in a team environment. There was a variety of new ice-cream cakes in the shop which were not popular among customers, so I proposed a "buy two boxes of ice-cream - get a free cake" offer. After a week, ice-cream cakes sales increased by more then 120%, and overall sales doubled. That month I was chosen an employee of the month.
By working in different areas I have developed oral, writing and interpersonal communication skills. I am highly organized and honest person and always eager to learn.
I would greatly appreciate if you provide me with some additional informational materials regarding employment opportunities at Accor Hotel, including an application form if necessary. Also, I would appreciate any information regarding my accommodation in or around the hotel during my possible employmet.
I will be able to start my employment at Accor Hotel on June 1, 2005 and expect to terminate it no later than October 1, 2005. I am fully authorized to work in the US.
Thank you for your time and consideration. I would be happy to discuss my employment opportunity at XXX hotel by e-mail xxx@hotmail.com or phone 7-(123)-123-4567
Sincerely,
Knyazev Kirill _________________
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Debaser Æèòåëü ôîðóìà
: 28.03.2003 : 941 : Cleveland, OH
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 äîãîíêó.  ðàçäåëå awards ïåðâûì äåëîì íóæíî ïèñàòü ïðî employee of the month, à íå ïðî ïðîãðàìèñòñêèå êîíêóðñû, IMHO. _________________
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Andrew Ãëàâíûé òðåïà÷
: 01.03.2003 : 10421 : Èðêóòñê, RU -> Los Angeles, US
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Ñêàæó ïî ñåêðåòó, íè íà êàêîé ñàéò òàêîé ðàáîòîäàòåëü çàõîäèòü íå áóäåò, íàôèã åìó ýòî íå íàäî. Íîðìàëüíîãî ðàáîòîäàòåëÿ âîëíóåò îäíî - áóäåò ëè íàíÿòûé ðàáîòíèê ðàáîòàòü çà òàêèå ñìåøíûå äåíüãè è áóäåò ëè ýòî çàêîííî. Âñå îñòàëüíîå åãî ïðîñòî íå èíòåðåñóåò. |
 ïðèíöèïå äà, òû ïðàâ. _________________ Àíäðåé Ãåðàñèìîâ |
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Andrew Ãëàâíûé òðåïà÷
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Ïðîãðåññ íà ëèöî
Åñëè âñå-òàêè óâåðåí, ÷òî íóæíî óêàçûâàòü “Tutor” – ïóñòü áóäåò. Ëè÷íî ÿ áû íå ñòàë, íàâåðíîå.
Óäà÷è ñ ïîèñêîì ðàáîòû! _________________ Àíäðåé Ãåðàñèìîâ |
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Helen_NJ Æèòåëü ôîðóìà
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Estranged, ïîãîäü åùå, íå îòïðàâëÿé ðåçþìå ñ ïèñüìîì. Ñì. íèæå ìîþ ïðàâêó ïðÿìî â òåêñòå. Èñïðàâëåííîå âûäåëåíî êóðñèâîì, à âûäåëåííîå êðàñíûì íóæíî óäàëèòü. Êîììåíòàðèè è ðàçúÿñíåíèÿ ñëåäóþò çà öèòàòîé.
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KNYAZEV KIRILL
Address: 13G-21 Sophie Perovskoi Street
Ufa, Bashkortostan, Russia 450103
Phone: 7 3472-545-119
Mobile: 89174008069
E-mail: knkirill@hotmail.com
Gender: Male
Age: 18
Objective
A temporary entry-level position in Hospitality Industry in which my experience and training can be utilized to our mutual benefit.
Experience 1. Tutor, April 2002 – October 2004
Taught students to play drums.
2. Housekeeper
June-August 2003
June-August 2004
Hotel Tourist, Ufa, Russia
Cleaned the hotel guest rooms
Inspected rooms and suites, reported to the hotel front desk which suites were clean.
3. Shop assistant, June – August 2002
Morozko Shop, Ufa, Russia
Responsible for the ice cream sales in a specialty store.
Education Higher education
Currently attending Ufa State University of Service (Ufa, Russia)
Majoring in Tourism and Hospitality Business
Estimated graduation date: June 2008
Current GPA: 5 of 5
High School Diploma
English Gymnasia #39 (Ufa, Russia) çäåñü íàäî ãîä îêîí÷àíèÿ øêîëû!
GPA: 4.9 of 5
Awards
Employee of the month, Morozko Shop, August 2002
Winner, 5th and the 6th republic scientific conferences in information science and web-design, 2001, 2002
Winner, republic students contest in information science “KRIT-2003”
Winner, annual philological students conference, 2004
Skills
Fluent in English, Russian
Considerable knowledge of German and Ukrainian
Excellent oral, writing and interpersonal communication skills
Highly organized
Able to grasp new ideas and integrate them into desired results
Computer experience: Advanced User (MS Windows 95-XP, MS Office, HTML and web design)
Activities Playing drums (Fall 2001 to Present)
Aikido (Summer 2003 to Present)
Swimming (1996-2000)
Judo and Unarmed self-defense (1993-1998)
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KNYAZEV KIRILL
13G-21 Sophie Perovskoi Street
Ufa, Bashkortostan, Russia 450103
(3472) 545-119
knkirill@hotmail.com
November 17, 2004
READER’S NAME
Reader's Title
Name of Company
Company Address
Dear Mr. READER’S NAME :
As a sophomore student at Ufa State University of Service, majoring in Tourism and Hospitality Business, I will participate in the “Work and Travel USA” program sponsored by the International Exchange Council. I would like to apply for a temporary position as a housekeeper at Accor Company. I have 6 months of experience working as a housekeeper in the Tourist hotel in Russia. My responsibilities included guest rooms cleaning, rooms inspection and reporting to the hotel front desk on their condition.
Working as a Shop Assistant during summer 2002, I have proven capacity to approach problems creatively and effectively, and to work well both independently and in a team environment. There was a variety of new ice cream cakes in the shop, which were not popular among customers, so I proposed a "buy two boxes of ice cream - get a free cake" offer. After just a week, ice cream cakes sales increased by more than 120%, and overall in-store sales doubled. As a result, I was named Employee of the Month.
By working in different areas I have developed oral, writing and interpersonal communication skills. I am highly organized and honest person and always eager to learn.
I will be able to start my employment with your company on June 1, 2005 and expect to terminate it no later than October 1, 2005. I am fully authorized to work in the US.
I would greatly appreciate if you could provide me with some additional information regarding employment opportunities at Accor Hotel, including an application form, if necessary. Also, I would appreciate any information regarding accommodations in or around the hotel during my possible employment.
Thank you for your time and consideration. I will be happy to discuss my employment opportunity at Accor hotel by e-mail knkirill@hotmail.com or by phone 7-(3472)-545-119.
Sincerely,
Kirill Knyazev
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Êîììåíòàðèè ê ïðàâêå:
1. Ôîðìàò àäðåñà â ÑØÀ: äîì, íàçâàíèå óëèöû, íîìåð êâàðòèðû
2. Íåàêêóðàòíîñòü - ýòî î÷åíü áîëüøàÿ îøèáêà, êîòîðóþ äîïóñêàþò ìíîãèå àâòîðû ðåçþìå. Íàïðèìåð, ó âàñ â îäíîì íîìåðå òåëåôîíà ñòîÿò ÷åðòî÷êè, à â äðóãîì íåò, ïîòîì äàòà íàïèñàíà "2003 & 2004" è ò.ä. Êàçàëîñü áû ìåëî÷ü, íî òîìó, êòî ÷èòàåò ðåçþìå, ýòî ñðàçó ãîâîðèò î âàøåì "attention to details" (or lack thereof). Ðåçþìå äîëæíî áûòü âûëèçàíî äî çàïÿòîé - àäðåñà, äàòû âñå â îäíîì ôîðìàòå, âåçäå îäèí ñòèëü è ò.ï.
3. Âîçðàñò è ïîë â ÑØÀ íå ïðèíÿòî óêàçûâàòü â ðåçþìå (õîòÿ ýòî íîðìàëüíî, íàïðèìåð, â Ãåðìàíèè). Òóò âñå î÷åíü ÷óâñòâèòåëüíû ê âîïðîñàì ëþáîé äèñêðèìèíàöèè è âàøå ðåçþìå äîëæíû îöåíèâàòü íà îñíîâå íàâûêîâ è îïûòà, à íå ïîëà è âîçðàñòà. Åñëè õîòèòå, âîçðàñò ìîæíî óïîìÿíóòü â cover letter, õîòÿ ïðèìåðíûé âîçðàñò ðàáîòîäàòåëü ìîæåò óãàäàòü ïî äàòàì îêîí÷àíèÿ øêîëû/óíèâåðñèòåòà. Ýòî âû, êñòàòè, çàáûëè óêàçàòü.
4. Îáðàçîâàíèå ïèøåòñÿ â ôîðìàòå: ïîëó÷åííàÿ ñòåïåíü (äèïëîì èëè àòòåñòàò), íàçâàíèå ó÷åáíîãî ó÷ðåæäåíèÿ, ãîä. Ò.ê. âû åùå ó÷èòåñü, âû íå ìîæåòå óêàçûâàòü Bachelor, ïðîñòî óêàæèòå "major". Äà, Gymnasium (AKA Gym) - ýòî ñïîðòçàë, ãèìíàçèÿ - ýòî Gymnasia, íå ïóòàéòå.
5. Èç âàøåãî ðåçþìå áûëî íå î÷åíü ïîíÿòíî, ÷òî âû åùå ó÷èòåñü è èùåòå ðàáîòó òîëüêî íà ëåòî. Ïîýòîìó ÿ èçìåíèëà Objective è íà÷àëî cover letter.
6. Âû î÷åíü ìàëî ðàññêàçûâàåòå î òîì, ÷òî äåëàëè íà ðàáîòå, íàäî áû äîáàâèòü. ×åñòíî ãîâîðÿ, ÿ íå çíàþ, çà÷åì âîîáùå óïîìèíàòü "tutor" - âûãëÿäèò áóäòî âû íåñêîëüêî ëåò, êàê çàé÷èê-ýíåðäæàéçåð, íà áàðàáàíå ñòó÷àëè.
7. Shop assistant ìîæåò áûòü íå î÷åíü ïðàâèëüíûì ïåðåâîäîì. Êàê ïî-ðóññêè-òî áûëî?
8. ß íåìíîãî íå ïîíÿëà, êàê ìîæíî áûòü "winner" íà êîíôåðåíöèè. Äóìàþ ðàáîòîäàòåëè òîæå íå ïîéìóò. Íàïèøèòå ëó÷øå "Award winner of the 5th and the 6th Republic Scientific Conference in Information Science" èëè ÷òî-òî â ýòîì ðîäå (íàçâàíèÿ íàäî ñ áîëüøîé áóêâû íà÷èíàòü, êñòàòè).
9. Åñëè âû íå çíàåòå èìåíè ïîëó÷àòåëÿ, ïèñüìî íàäî íà÷èíàòü "Dear Sir or Madam". Íå çàáûâàéòå èñïðàâëÿòü íà Ms, åñëè îáðàùàåòåñü ê æåíùèíå.
10. Íå íà÷èíàéòå ïèñüìî ñ "My name is...". Âî-ïåðâûõ, ýòî íå øêîëüíûé òîïèê, âî-âòîðûõ, âàøå èìÿ óæå óêàçàíî âûøå. Åñëè ïèøåòå ñâîå èìÿ, òî ñíà÷àëà ïèøèòå èìÿ, à ïîòîì ôàìèëèþ (íåäàðîì â ÑØÀ ãîâîðÿò "first name", "last name"!)
11. Ice cream ïèøåòñÿ ðàçäåëüíî, à entry-level ÷åðåç äåôèñ.
12. "cakes sales" (è åùå ìíîãî àíàëîãè÷íûõ) - î÷åíü ðàñïðîñòðàíåííàÿ îøèáêà ñðåäè ðóññêîÿçû÷íûõ. Ïðàâèëüíî "cake sales" èëè "sales of the cakes". Åñëè íàäî ðàçúÿñíåíèå - ýòî â äðóãóþ òåìó.
Åñëè ÷òî-òî ïðîïóñòèëà - ñîððè. |
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